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You're the Sun, he hummed in her ear,
And it burns.

My face is left numb and battered,
Thirsting for the moon's light and moonbows
To wash me, bathe me.

Watch the stars sing for me, she said,
And was left shivering the night away
As she dreamt of waves and thawing winds.

Her mouth is dry;
Trembling fingernails click, tick and flick;
I quench my thirst with the flesh of fallen angels
And die for each one of them as the dawn approaches.

(Chapter one  - Chapter null)

We would say:
And children rush their nebulous dreams,
So as to witness the first light of day,
Drowning them in secrecy:
Their hearts are but tombs where no light shall shine upon.

Orange light tumbles over mountain slides,
Dancing with the grass in its pearl dress;
Coffins: seedless seeds and pretty little beads that glitter when lit.

And the rain poured in roofs and railings unmercifully,
Washing their nebulous dreams away.

My god, they cried. We'll never see the light of day;
And thus they retired to their cardboard beds and ripped jeans and shirts,
Dreaming of oceans of blue and mirrors in the sun
With hymns in their hair, sung by an unforgiving winter
And snow that clung to their bones.
My god they would cry
Yet again, in quiet desperation,
And in utter silence they would close the eyes
That had seen nothing but their squandered childhoods.

Weather brews; the heavens dim and everything is still.
Sow bugs retire from their daily routines to watch and listen.

Louder than gusts of wind were the cries and sighs of the restless children;
Looking in each other's eyes they seemed to whisper:

We                               
                                       are   
                                                                                lost
.

Their words would saunter the night, resting on rooftops
And brooks that babbled nonsense in their ears.

And mother's voice would ring loudly in their thoughts, calling them home.
Kites would soar another day and smiles would wait for tomorrow's basket of laughters
So hearts would not turn sour.

And only in their dreams would they truly be free.
©2007-2009 *StrayedMusician
:iconstrayedmusician:

Author's Comments

This is a collaboration between João, *ThelemaJ, and me. It was inspired by our past conversations. And well, the poem sort of came out of nowhere; we improvised. In many collaborations that I've read, every other stanza was written by one person and the stanzas in between, by the other writer. Well, in this poem, every other line would be written by João or me. The stanzas came in later, really. This poem started out with just lines. In other words, if you were to critique/comment on the stanzas, you would be speaking to both of João and I, and not just one writer.

Yes well, enjoy the read and we both look forward to your critiques/feedback.

Thank you kindly,

Khaty & João


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*Preview: ~ssuunnddeeww

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:iconwhiteflamehariel:
Very interesting. It causes me to think about multiple things at once which none of them are linked together except through this poem because of the details given. It also makes me wish that it was warm enough to give birth to the rain I now desire :/ but i sure as heck don't want rain in this cold weather. Lest I freeze my bones and let the snow cover me and preserve my body until spring/summer.

--
Sometimes I don't know why we'd rather live than die,
we look up towards the sky for answers to our lives.
We may get some solutions but most just pass us by,
don't want your absolution cause I can't make it right.
~Avenged Sevenfold - Bat Country
:iconstrayedmusician:
The day will come.

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no. i was there.
:iconthelemaj:
I'll just add it to my favorites for no particular reason.

Oh wait, I've got one. It's so more people can read it. Yeah.

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The fiery windowsills of a setting sun.
:iconarctoa:
Often, collaborations don't work. It's too easy to pick out who wrote what, and the piece ends up being two disparate pieces of pseudo-literature, stitched together. This, however, works.

The last line reminds me of a line by Anathema; "Freedom is only a hallucination, That waits at the edge of the places you go when you dream..." Mm, yes. Good work.
:iconvixyyfox:
Loved it... really and truly.

V
:iconstrayedmusician:
Thank you kindly for the read.

--
i died at the lake today. my god, they cried.
:iconstrayedmusician:
-chuckles-

Orright, eh.

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i died at the lake today. my god, they cried.
:iconstrayedmusician:
Ahh well, I'm glad you enjoyed the read. 'Tis greatly appreciated and all.
Yes, I'm quite proud of this piece as well--and that's rare. Heh. Yes,
thank you, thank you.

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i died at the lake today. my god, they cried.
:iconconradseymour:
One of your best Khaty. i think collaborating has pushed you further...

--
Even a stopped clock tells the right time twice a day.
:iconstrayedmusician:
Thank you, Dave. Your read is greatly appreciated.

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i died at the lake today. my god, they cried.

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